Hmm, this one’s slightly better. Though wacky at first glance, this is how 55 fiction is. The last line was the uplifting one. Decent. P.S.: Rosemary, huh? Niiice!
Yea this one's more like it.Although you could've altered the ending so that the 'She was hanging from the ceiling.' sentence came last.Just a suggestion though... Good story. :)
@daone:ohh i wont compare the two!!first one was written just to add that light factor to my blog.glad that everyone took it in a fun way!!this one-haha i was back to my darker side!!and in the near future too you will find mostly these type of 55 fiction story's only from me!!thx for reading and replying!!yeah i luv the name rosemary!!keep reading!!
@samadrita:ohh swapping the two sentences would have completely altered the ending!!read it the other way and you will find out wat i mean!!glad that you liked my work!!thx for replying!!keep reading!!
Hmm, this one’s slightly better. Though wacky at first glance, this is how 55 fiction is. The last line was the uplifting one. Decent.
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Yea this one's more like it.Although you could've altered the ending so that the 'She was hanging from the ceiling.' sentence came last.Just a suggestion though...
ReplyDeleteGood story. :)
@daone:ohh i wont compare the two!!first one was written just to add that light factor to my blog.glad that everyone took it in a fun way!!this one-haha i was back to my darker side!!and in the near future too you will find mostly these type of 55 fiction story's only from me!!thx for reading and replying!!yeah i luv the name rosemary!!keep reading!!
ReplyDelete@samadrita:ohh swapping the two sentences would have completely altered the ending!!read it the other way and you will find out wat i mean!!glad that you liked my work!!thx for replying!!keep reading!!
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