Fingers tingling of my feet,
Foot tapping music here to play,
Drunken people on the street,
And I grab a hand below me,
Sending shiver down my spine,
Our love is here to stay,
And baby you ever smell the same,
Eyes of mysteries and shadows,
We dance till the night turns away,
And the air never felt the same,
Till it whiskered past your shoulders,
Tingling my senses in every way,
And baby our love is here to stay,
Words of love never felt the same,
Till they took a sip of your lips,
And drunkenness overshadowed my senses,
Two pairs of slippers left at the doorway,
Cold sleepy stone steps never felt this way,
And tonight our love is here to stay,
And the feelings felt for you my love,
Will never be felt for someone else again,
As there is no other woman on this earth,
Who makes me go nuts every second,
And I may never feel so insane again,
As madness was a habit never diagnosed,
And doctors said it’s too late my son,
Tonight your love is here to stay,
And the hospital left their belongings,
At the door way and danced away,
Into the night of dreams and love,
And love in this world is here to stay,
As hate may never feel the same again,
You and I shall live the dream again,
And baby our love is here to stay,
And people need some love,
To be the same like they always did,
Again,
This world may never feel the same again,
Baby, our love is here to stay.
captivating and inspiring!
ReplyDelete"Words of love never felt the same,
ReplyDeleteTill they took a sip of your lips"
^Amazing.
A bit of criticism- you've used the lines "And our love is here to stay" repeatedly, which is, of course, not a bad thing at all. But there's a little symmetry that's lacking. Like 1st three stanzas are fine- 6 lines and then 'and our love...' But then it kinda goes off. I'm not much into poetry so this probably might be a style but personally, I would've preferred symmetry.
'Insane' is generally a clinical term, even by a poet's license even though it is used very casually in today's world, just like 'depression'. I would've been fine with that if you had not set up certain high standards already.
Yes, that was a compliment.
Also, when I give more criticism that praise in a particular comment, it means that I've liked it 'so' much to want to critically view it.
So there you go, another compliment!
"And the hospital left their belongings,
At the door way and danced away"
I didn't get this part. Could you explain it please?